To: Professor Brad Blackstone
Senior Lecturer
Centre for Communication Skills
Singapore Institute of Technology @ Dover
10 Dover Drive
Singapore 138683
Date: 10 September 2017
Subject: Self-Introduction
Dear Professor Blackstone,
My name is Jasson Juay Wei Sheng and I am writing to introduce myself as a student in your class. I have graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with a diploma in environmental and water technology in 2015. During my course of study in the polytechnic, I began to grow interest in green energy and the build environment sector. Hence, I decided to further my studies in the sustainable infrastructure engineering (Building Services) programme.
Strength and Weakness
As I reflect on my strength, I believe that I am a good listener. During group projects, I am able to listen attentively to what my friends have to say. This enables them to voice out their chain of thoughts, without any interruption midway through the speech. I would only voice out when they are done, so that I could respond to it appropriately.
As for my weakness, it would be my poor ability to write well. When it comes to written assignments, inclusive of this self-introduction task, I have a tendency to take a long duration to write them. This is due to my incapability to organise and process the thoughts fast and well.
Goals for the module
What I hope to achieve from this module is to improve on my weakness and further hone my strength, so that I can improve on my communication skills. With better communication skills, I would be able to engage in meaningful discussions and develop relationships with others. As such, I look forward to learning more about effective communication from you in the coming classes.
Best regards,
Jasson Juay
SIE 2016 (Group 5)
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Greetings,
ReplyDeleteThe message of your reflection is very clear, and the paragraphs are well structured.
Good job!
Regards,
yongquan
Dear Yong Quan,
DeleteThank you for your kind words!
Regards,
Jasson
Dear Jasson,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this clear, concise and well organized letter. We learn quite a bit in it about your view of your own communication skills and your educational background though it is short. You also have set achievable goals for this module.
Your language use is fluent in this letter, but there are a couple issues to take note of:
1) ...written assignments, inclusive of this self-introduction task, I tend to take a long duration to write it.... >>> (problematic pronoun referent)
2) With better communication skills, I would be able to engage in meaningful discussions and develop relationships with one another. >>> (phrasing) Who is engaging with one another?
I appreciate your effort.
Cheers,
Brad
Dear Brad,
DeleteThank you for your feedback. The blog has been edited according to the issues you have point out. Please accept my sincere apologies for not giving back a reply, when a comment has been given to me.
Regards,
Jasson
Dear Jasson,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your post. It was easy to understand. These are my thoughts on how you can improve for this reflection.
1. Cut down redundant words so that you have capacity to further emphasize of other points or even add new points into the reflection. A few examples are
- I graduated from Ngee An polytechnic
- My goals for this module is to....
2. Strengthen my strength>> further hone my strength
3. For paragraph 3, I feel that it is too long a sentence structure. Perhaps you may wish to consider breaking them into 2 parts. First would be "When it comes to written assignments....... long duration to write it. This is due to my inability to.....
Overall I think it is a good attempt! Keep up the optimism and fire to improve:)
Cheers
Joel Leow Zhi Yuan
Dear Joel,
DeleteThank you for taking time off to read and identifying errors on my blog post. The blog has been edited accordingly.
Regards,
Jasson
Hey Jasson, I like how neat your letter is. It looks very clear what each paragraph is talking about. Do take note though, that if you want to abbreviate "sustainable infrastructure engineering", you need to capitalise the first letter of each word, as if it was a proper noun:
ReplyDeleteSustainable Infrastructure Engineering (SIE)
Moreover, abbreviations should only be used when you want to utilise it again later in your letter. Otherwise, it is not recommended if you're not utilising the abbreviation again (abbreviations will be rendered useless. it adds to your word count too).
Dear Keric,
DeleteThank you for pinpointing the suggestion for my blog. The abbreviation has been removed as I would only be using the term once.
Regards,
Jasson
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Deleteorry I got one point wrong. When you abbreviate something, you need not capitalise the first letter of those words if it is not a proper noun. "sustainable infrastructure engineering (SIE)"
DeleteHowever, the one on using the term only once still applies.